Date: 05/12/2012 12:37 PM Title: This is Hoeme
Beautiful 1st outing! Pay some attention to grammar and punctuation and your stories will shine. Can't wait to see more from you!
Thank you, yes I know I have a lot to work on with grammar and punctuation, I hope to write more soon and hopefully get better. Thank you^^
Date: 04/29/2012 5:43 PM Title: This is Hoeme
Oh that was nice and very sweet. Very good first fic. I encourage you to write more if you have found that you enjoy it.
Author's Response: Thank you^^ I have in mind for another song fic. hopefully I'll have it out soon^^
Date: 04/29/2012 5:01 PM Title: This is Hoeme
I thought this was very sweet and I enjoyed the jumps throughout their evolving relationship. I did notice, however, that you need to work on sentence structure and punctuation as it relates to periods. There were instances where you ended a sentence and began another that was really just a continuation of the sentence previous.
Still, great story, great premiss and I love the song too, by the way.
Author's Response: Thank you very much^^ Yes grammar and punctuation are my worst!!! I hope I improve as I write lol my English professors complained about them too. I'm going to more song fics I think and gradually work my way up^^ Thanx again for your thoughts^^