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Date: 01/09/2016 4:47 PM Title: Chapter 19

Part of being a healthcare professional means respecting the culture of the patient in question. If Kirk insisted a bath would do him more harm than good she should have heeded that and not been so dismissive. Or at a bare minimum called one of her superiors for an opinion. Usually there's common ground but being authoritarian like she is doesn't do anyone any good.

I agree though Kirk should have done it. At least Spock wouldn't be getting handled by a stranger.

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Date: 01/09/2016 3:55 PM Title: Chapter 11

It sounds like after what Spock has been through Kirk is going into defensive mode.

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Date: 01/09/2016 1:32 PM Title: Chapter 10

This was a good chapter. Although these episodes Spock is having are terrifying and quite effective at being terrifying, it's nice to see the camaraderie between Kirk and Bones.

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Date: 01/09/2016 8:53 AM Title: Chapter 8

It sounds like the last few days are catching up to him. You did a good job with this chapter. I really feel bad for him.

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Date: 01/09/2016 8:13 AM Title: Chapter 6

Love these ruminations he goes into when he's alone and has to ponder what happene.

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Date: 01/09/2016 8:12 AM Title: Chapter 5

Jim has to deal with the mess left behin. This should be interestin.

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Date: 01/09/2016 8:07 AM Title: Chapter 4

It's nice to see in the middle of this whole blitzkrieg youve got a brief moment that's sweet and tender. By that I mean the moment when Spock wakes up and they have a brief exchange before he goes back to sleep. Loved that exchange no speaking for circumstance that put them there.

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Date: 01/11/2015 8:46 PM Title: Chapter 9

Good chapter but I'm at a bit of a loss as to what this nightmare is supposed to symbolize. Likewise good chapter

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Date: 08/02/2014 10:42 PM Title: Chapter 3

This is a good chapter. You did a great job creating a sense of urgency.

Reviewer: Bi trekkie Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/10/2013 2:29 AM Title: Chapter 32

This is so sad

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Date: 07/16/2012 4:00 PM Title: Chapter 1

Good of course, I am sure Spock would prefer old and Jim scented.

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Date: 07/16/2012 2:24 PM Title: Chapter 30

One can almost feel and smell the jacket settling on Spock's shoulders.



Author's Response:

Is that good?  Let's hope Kirk gives it a wash occassionally... XD

Reviewer: Dahliaxat Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/16/2012 4:48 AM Title: Chapter 29

Now, that's the James Kirk we know and love. Looking forward to the new and improved Jim.

 

Update when you can.

Reviewer: Dahliaxat Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/16/2012 4:36 AM Title: Chapter 28

Spock's attitude towards his mother is shocking. But, have they often seen eye to eye? No. Spock has his reasons for not having her there. His attempted suicide, surely has something to do with his past...something he may have recalled that came to the surface...something that he had buried...when one buries their feelings like Spock has, eventually, because he is human it will come to the surface...you cannot keep emotions in check, forever...like a boiling pot with the lid tightly on....something will bubble up.  

Spock has certainly told Amanda honestly what he thinks of her...and he didn't hold anything back...Now, she is gone leaving Jim....beside himself...

Spock may sound different from the Spock we know, an individual who can control his emotinal outburst so easily. Now, he simply can't. 

Reviewer: Dahliaxat Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/16/2012 4:22 AM Title: Chapter 27

I really like this chapter but you need to read it again. It repeats itself, in many places...and I am not sure about the ending. Does it end with Spock's side. Or was there more in this chapter?

Author's Response:

Oh, ffs...  There, I think I've fixed that now.  I really don't know what keeps going wrong with the formatting - it is so aggravating!  And always on the chapters you don't check...  Thank you for pointing that out - I wish more people would!

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Date: 07/16/2012 4:17 AM Title: Chapter 26

If I could go back in time and live my life again, would I still have my little baby? I don't know… with all the misery he's had to cope with over the years, maybe I wouldn't. with all the misery he's had to cope with over the years, maybe I wouldn't.

Just to let you know, the line repeats.

What a question? Would I have my child if I knew? Well, Jim is sure grateful she did. He says that Spock completes him, and we all believe that. Is the pain Spock went through in life worth it? Only Spock can answer that.

Very moving chapter my dear.

Author's Response:

Thanks for pointing that out about the extra line.  I've no idea what keeps going wrong with the formatting - it's so annoying!!! Grrrrr...

 

And thank you very much for keeping on commenting :)  Glad you find this chapter moving.

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Date: 07/16/2012 4:08 AM Title: Chapter 25

So many things to consider why Spock would take his own life...Jim feeling so helpless...he loves him so much, but it doesn't seem to cure him does it...he isn't any more open... I suppose it would drive anyone nuts ..the not knowing...and thinking that perhaps you didn't do enough in the relationship...if you did ..he wouldn't have attempted suicide...the mind is very complet...so many variables come into play.

Jim is entitled to cry...why not?  His emotions, he is wearing them on his sleeve...crying one moment, being hysterical with anger the next...it's normal...

And then we go down memory lane to that dreadful day where he tried to take his life....not pleasant to hear once again...for both I am sure...

Very emotional chapter....really good.

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Date: 07/16/2012 3:59 AM Title: Chapter 24

It's tough when you wish for the person you love to get off his arse and be like before...he loves me ..he should make the effort...right?  Sometimes, I suppose the victim just doesn't want to come out of his confort zone.  He knows what lies ahead...and just doesn't want to face it just yet...and procrastinates. Can I Vulcan procrastinate? Hmmm good question..well he is half human.

Jim reminds me of Shatner and his late wife Nerine...if you love me you will stop drinking....it doesn't work that way....

It's almost like they are strangers doesn't it?

And now we have a visitor...more fun times ahead....

another great chapter, that I can see clearly in my head...great job.



Author's Response:

I hadn't thought of the parallel with Shatner and his wife... very astute, Denise!  It is true - we think that if you love someone enough then it will conquer all, but it doesn't...  Poor Jim, they are strangers at the moment - he's seeing this part of Spock which he didn't acknowledge existed before and it is tough.  

Glad you like the chapter - thanks for reviewing!

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Date: 07/16/2012 3:50 AM Title: Chapter 23

I can see him eating that chocolate....and being embarrassed being caught....hmmmm Godiva chocolate. Seriously, I think he's eating more because of boredom, stress, feeling lonely...I think we understand him in that regard...poor Jim...you go ahead and eat that chocolate bonbon..we won't judge you.... Spock is behaving, letting the nurse remove the cast...Love how you describe in detail how the wound looks now...angry india green you called it. How it being covered for so long, not being well ventilated, it would not look pretty. Now, the cast if off, his arm is bandaged up and has a sling...things are progressing...now the nurse has decided to leave, leaving Jim..lost once again. Strange how he can go toe to toe with Klingons and Romulans but being alone with Spock..being ill..scares the shit out of him... And...now he has to see a shrink...fun times ahead... Love this chapter..well done.

Author's Response:

Glad you like it!  Thank you :)

Yes, Jim and his comfort eating... you are so right!

Reviewer: oyboh Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/12/2012 10:51 AM Title: Chapter 26

Rereading, I find myself seeing Spock's motives more clearly. After a certain number of years of refusal on the part of others of one's existence--particularly as one arrives at adolesence--cutting is a way of not only letting out the disapproved anger, but also of proving one does exist. I bleed, therefore I exist.

And the habit lurks always.

Known facts, but they wake up and bite.

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