Date: 11/29/2011 8:32 PM Title: Chapter 1
The "should I tell him" scene was perfect. I think this is h/c done right. I also like how tenacious Kirk is in trying to get an answer out of Spock.
I feel like Kirk's personal assessment of their relationship changes during the course of this story. He tells himself it's temporary at the beginning, but after his struggle to get Spock back, I think his gestalt has altered somewhat. Would you agree?
Maybe he needs to think about tackling the appropriate paperwork.
Date: 11/21/2011 10:13 PM Title: Chapter 3
Damn, I forgot this was a WIP and was reaching for Chapter 4! Wonderfully written as usual, great story. I'm dying to see what happens next. Guess I'll just have console myself with one of your updates from your other series while I'm waiting... *g*
Date: 11/19/2011 9:42 PM Title: Chapter 3
Loving this; Jim's desperation was palpable. I have a thought though, Uhura was with Jim and Spock when the security people were killed So his statement to her that they killed security and removed him and Spock was redundant - yes? unless he's so adrenalin fuelled he's forgotten the sequence of events. Which would make sense.
Anyway waiting for more now; great story.
Date: 11/11/2011 1:39 PM Title: Chapter 2
Great action sequence. Graphic and gritty.
Date: 11/11/2011 12:14 PM Title: Chapter 2
I just did a Wily Coyote and now have to climb all the way back up the cliff face so I can hang. Man.
You have the Improvised Revolutionary down perfectly. Gimme uh Uzzzzi! Me use for club!
Can we wall'em all up in the--random house? lol--and mud up the door and windows? And hope for sunny days.
Date: 11/04/2011 9:32 PM Title: Chapter 1
Fantastic first chapter, can't wait to read the next one. Regarding the other reviewer, people who aren't from the southern US should keep their opinions to themselves regarding regional speech patterns - your ignorance is showing.
Date: 11/04/2011 5:25 PM Title: Chapter 1
Wonderful! Did somebody get your goat?--the anger and the--roflol!--description of the Monarians...something is reminding me of unpleasant academic personnel. The ugliness, the screeching.
Now oc I'm back on my tenterhook cushion.
Oh btw--did the 1st Resistance Monarians learn Standard from some deep DEEP-South American? XD
Actually, no. This is just what happens when my soundboard challenges me. Can't even remember the original challenge!
And I prefer to call that 'accent' "drowning Welshman" but Deep South American works too ;)