Date: 05/23/2012 7:17 PM Title: Chapter 1
A very good story overall - I really enjoyed it. But the end is too pat and comes too quickly. You could always write another chapter detailing how Winona finds out what really went on and Jim is able to find release from his hatred. Perhaps a familial meld moderated By Spock? Just speculating. But please don't consider this a flame. I really liked the story. Loved the scene where Spock backs Jim down on the bridge and then consults with McCoy.
Date: 04/19/2012 11:59 AM Title: Chapter 1
Gah, I'm in the mood to seriously kick some butts, one of those preferably being Winona's. I can't believe she didn't believe her boys, that she had been so blind and ... uncaring.
I would have loved if Uhura had told her to please shut the fu** up in the mess when her stories became more and more embarrassing, not only for the Kirk brothers but for the audience as well.
However: good story :)
Date: 02/20/2012 3:55 PM Title: Chapter 1
Wow... The story is great if somewhat disturbing. These matters always leave me with a wish to rip someone's throat off and with no evident victim... frustrating a bit...
But I wanted to comment on "leave the con" phrase. I always thought it "leave the console to you" thing until you wrote your notes on the subject here... You know, the console being the main feature to control something digtal like a ship, or a computer. I actually registered on this site to write this.
THanks again for a story :)
Date: 11/08/2011 6:31 AM Title: Chapter 1
As a person that was molested as a child by a 'trusted' neighbor, I could see all of the signs in Jim's anger and avoidance of his mother, but I'm sure you weren't trying to hide them. I wanted to slap Winona when she was telling embarrassing stories to Jim's junior officers. I'm a mom and we all do it, but not with your child's co-workers and where they need to command respect to do their job - Winona is so clueless and self absorbed that it's unbelievable to me that someone hasn't slapped her or given her a piece of their mind. Despite her history with Jim, I don't like her or find her amusing (she reminds me a bit of my M-I-L)! As much as I enjoyed this story for the insight into the inner workings of James Kirk and the support of Spock and McCoy, I still feel like this story is unfinished - like it had more to tell, but you're the author and I thank you for sharing.
Author's Response: You're right-- I wasn't trying to hide them. I also wasn't trying to make Winona into a likable character necessarily. I occasionally find myself around people that I *try* to like but just can't seem to do it, and that was kind of where I wanted to put her-- someone who is difficult to like, but also not a villain. Just a little oblivious. Thanks for your comments
Date: 10/17/2011 12:40 AM Title: Chapter 1
Nicely done essay on a deadly-serious topic. Winona reminded me in a way of the mother in the movie Precious. Sadly, some people have kids who really don't have enough going on upstairs to be responsible for them. Frank sounds like a true sicko. At least as a society we're getting wiser to how this stuff happens. Not just the stranger-with-candy trope from M.
I'm glad Kirk decided to reconcile with his brother.
Author's Response: I haven't seen the movie, so I'm not sure if that's what I was going for or not. Thanks for your comments.