Date: 08/21/2012 8:52 PM Title: Casus Belli
What an intriguing chapter... It is truly amazing how you are able to fill in the gaps and make the story more complete. The research you have done must have been exhausting...the Klingon and Vulcan language is always a fascinating one.
Very much enjoyed the conversation concerning Sarek's health and the connection that the Vulcans have among themselves...Poor Amanda has no idea what has transpired on board the Enterprise, for if she was Vulcan, she would have been affected like Sarek...
A well weaved chapter my friend....update when you can.
Date: 07/29/2012 2:07 AM Title: An Errand of Diplomacy
I was intrigued that you changed direction with this story. It had ended on a sad note, and now we see the past with Sybok, later when Jim and Spock are bondmates.
What an interesting take of how Sybok differs from other Vulcans, due to what he knows, and what he claims to be the truth. Sarek isn't happy Jim and Spock has done things differently than is the Vulcan norm. Not doing the tradional Vulcan way is a big no no.
Now, years later we have Spock not too happy about the katra thingy. Jim needs to know.
Great job my friend
Date: 07/26/2012 11:14 AM Title: An Errand of Diplomacy
I actually had to go back and re read since I have the memory of a knat. This story is exciting, informative, powerful and addicting. It is rare that I want to read one more than once. I look forward to the next installment!
Date: 07/25/2012 7:09 AM Title: The Past Is Prologue
So well written, easy to read flowing and generates such wonderful pictures. Your Sybok is masterful, the idea that his mother had all the knowledge of what it was to be Vulcan and secretly thought it wrong yet entombed for her beliefs. Did Sybok succeed iI wonder?
Date: 05/02/2012 2:58 PM Title: A Moment of Great Upheaval
This was brilliant. We always want to make it sound just right. We tweak, we edit, we start over.. You did an excellent job, love all the little bits of Klingon history. The poetry of course, Shakespeare. The mention of Kang and Mara...and of course the brilliance of Mr. Okrand.
The ending of course is very sad..we all know what happened...but I am curious, wouldn't Amanda feel the loss of her son as well? Since they are bonded, perhaps, Sarek is blocking the link so she doesn't feel the loss. Just curious..Looking forward to the next chapter...well done.
Date: 05/02/2012 3:18 AM Title: A Moment of Great Upheaval
This is good writing. There are times for fluff and PWP but this is a tale in the best literary sense. Great character development and exposition of emotion. Wonderful exploration of culture and biology and their influences on people. Well worth the wait
Date: 03/26/2012 1:33 AM Title: Noble Harry of England
I know...isn't that strange casting. Same actor playing in the fifth and sixth movie. You won't believe this my friend...really bizarre but I was thinking of you today, and was wondering if you were going to update one of your fics. I love the fact you are giving us background information. I had to re-read all the chapters again. It is truly an interesting read. I feel like I am reading a novel from pocket books. Such great attention to detail. How everything fits together. Estaban is in your story...which is great ..love to see more about who this man was before he met his fate on the Grissom.
Amanda is so worried about her son...Sarek is going to be hit hard when he feels his son pass. How will he tell Amanda...
Looking forward to more...
I know it isn't easy getting all what you wish to convey about Talbot, Koord, Gorkon etc...but u are doing a great job my dear...
Your muse will guide you...
Date: 09/28/2011 9:38 PM Title: Play Our Parts for King and Country
EEEEE! Okay, talks are stalling and Gorkon is doing his best but the winds of change are upon them. The Federation thinks the Klingons had something to do with the Mutara battle. The Klingons think the Federation is amassing their Fleet. Nobody's going to stop and check before something bad happens. And Amanda is pissed at Sarek and Sarek insists he would have felt something happening to Spock. Yeah, but what if he passed his katra to someone else before he died?! Exciting times! Thanks for a wonderful chapter and for heavens' sakes, MORE PLEASE!
I am going to try very hard to be more regular with my updates to this story. Even though I'm working on "Meld Away the Butterflies" right now too, it's actually been HELPFUL rather than distracting like I thought it was going to be. Just having something silly to work on...I pop off a chapter of that, then I'm ready to get back down to business on this story. I may be onto something here...
Yup, everything's pretty much going straight to heck in a handbasket this chapter. Mutual suspicion, peace talks rapidly falling apart. Gorkon is going to have to play a part he doesn't want to. Sarek's been forced to play a part pretty much his whole life.
I'd say more about the katra, but I don't want to ruin anything. :)
I've got a good start on the next chapter already, but it's kinda messy right now, and there's still a lot to write before it's going to be ready for posting. There's going to be some nice stuff about Shakespeare in it, though!
Date: 09/02/2011 12:16 AM Title: Tradition Ourselves to Death
Great chapter Jen. I think this is one of the first fan stories I've ever read that took a really good look at the Klingon race and culture, and how the universe is seen through their eyes. I'm glad you remember those conversations we had about Sarek. Many people saw him as cold and indifferent towards Spock. I saw him as a proud man (even though he wouldn't admit to pride) shaped by his culture, and who only wanted Spock to be completely prepared before he left Vulcan. As I had said to you, to know himself fully as a Vulcan before he seached for his human side.
I really wanted the opportunity to explore the "Klingon equation," if you will. We so rarely see the stories in Star Trek from their perspective, least of all in The Search for Spock. They're just painted as the baddies, which, while making for good movies, also creates an amazingly simplistic and naive picture of the universe.
I fully acknowledge that part of this story provides me with the chance to play Devil's Advocate...because every time I watch movies 3-6, I can't help but wonder if the Klingons don't have a legitimate beef with the Federation. I mean, if I found out that my enemy had secretly created the equivalent to the galactic atomic bomb, I'd probably be pretty nervous about it too and want to do something about it.
So here is a chance to explore that Klingon viewpoint, to show that the Federation isn't the only one to distrust its enemies from time to time. Sometimes the enemies have a reason to distrust us as well.
Date: 09/01/2011 10:40 PM Title: Tradition Ourselves to Death
Okay. I'm following along. If I'm understanding correctly, (and this is farther in the story so forgive me for starting so far in) there was a battle between two Starfleet ships. That would be when Spock died? Just curious. I happen to like Gorkon. I love the way you're portraying him. Even if he's set in his ways, he's pretty freaking awesome. I loved how he told Sarek neither of them belonged on Nimbus III. I'm curious to see how this works out. Great chapter!
I know that it's not exactly clear which battle is taking place. Couldn't really be helped, but I wanted to lend that confusion about what's going on to the scene. The battle that is referenced (and this will become much more apparent to everyone over the next two chapters, I hope, after they see a certain something occur with Sarek) is actually the first face off between Khan and Jim & Spock, before the Enterprise visits Regula One.
I really love the point where Gorkon is at in this story. His own views, for personal reasons, are quite different from those of other Klingons. He's a bit of an anthropologist, a bit of a philosopher (or, as Azetbur said in ST:VI, "an idealist"). His views aren't in step with the views of other Klingons; his fellows are looking at the world of today, thinking about tomorrow; Gorkon, on the other hand, sees grand strokes of the universe, the really big picture. He looks years, decades into the future when thinking about his actions of today. He knows that the universe changes, and he's struggling to bring his people into that changing world. The trouble is that they don't want to go where he wants to lead, and that forces him to moderate his views. When he's dealing with outsiders, he's forced to tow the regular Klingon line to some extent, because rocking the boat too much in the Klingon Empire tends to get one killed.
The interesting thing about that conversation that he and Sarek had, about them not belonging on Nimbus III...you could really look at that whole conversation as a metaphor for K/S. Nimbus III would be the K/S relationship; they have to unburden themselves of a lot of cultural baggage in order to be together. But there are always those, like Sarek, who try to impose their views, who try to change that relationship. The relationship between Jim and Spock takes Spock away from the things that Sarek knows as familiar, from the things that Sarek values...and I think that's a pretty scary thing for any parent, to watch a child go somewhere that, because it's strange to the parent, the parent can't follow.
Date: 08/29/2011 5:12 AM Title: The Fool of Quin'lat
Great chapter! Looking forward to more...
Thanks! Hopefully you will continue to enjoy it. I have to wonder some days when I'm writing: it always sounds so much better in my head than it ever does written down in my computer. :-p