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Reviewer: Hypatia Kosh Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/28/2011 8:34 AM Title: Hands

I find that the image of the two of them falling asleep in their clothing on top of the bed is really cute. Somebody should make a pic.

The next-to-last paragraph was interesting. While I found your writing style a little stilted (perhaps to sound like Spock? but to me he's the master of the polysyllabic, witty utterance, not jerky, choppy phrases), I actually find the content quite interesting. Also appreciate the good spelling and grammar... although I think the uploader is eating your emdashes.

With Jim it was easy there was no judgment, no ‘cheap shots’ it was just easy.

Try retyping the em-dashes as two hyphens ('--') after you upload, I guess?



Author's Response:

Thank you for your advice and feedback. I apreciate it.

Reviewer: oyboh Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/25/2011 3:47 PM Title: Hands

Are you gonna throw stuff at me if I say it's sweet? Well *ducking* it is, and in the best way possible. And tender and warm.

Doh--I imagine Jim has "the most compassionate and caring heart"...and still on hearts, who would have the cold heart? (cold hands/warm heart) or didn't I get it? And I don't write anything, so this ain't "critical" criticism.



Author's Response:

I kind of wrote this about my friend, I honestly have no idea where it came from (i think it was about midnight) the cold heart is supposedly jims when going by his hands *crosses fingers and hopes* Does that make anny sense?

... And no i will not throw stuff at you.



Author's Response:

I kind of wrote this about my friend, I honestly have no idea where it came from (i think it was about midnight) the cold heart is supposedly jims when going by his hands *crosses fingers and hopes* Does that make anny sense?

... And no i will not throw stuff at you.

Reviewer: TheChee Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04/25/2011 3:12 PM Title: Hands

This is such a little treasure! :) A gem of a story, I hope you write much more in the future. Pacing, phrasing, word choice, all fit together very well. Clearly you're an experienced writer - I'm glad you decided to turn your talents to K/S fanfic.

Author's Response:

Would it surprise you to know that this was my firsr fic ever! i have about 4 others posted over on Fanfiction.net published under: LaurAmour if you are interested. Thank you for your kind words.

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