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Reviewer: Euphoracle Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 10/01/2010 5:45 AM Title: none

 I wasn't sure if you meant for this fic to be a spoof of TOS or not, so I almost decided to include no comments about this stuff.  On further thought, I realized that the comical elements weren't the main theme at all.  Realizing this, I thought I should point out some issues that I noticed.  Spock is a little OOC in this story, lots of sobbing, human curse words, mentions of a "God".  Also, meditation is all about no distractions, so why is Spock kneeling to meditate?  Kneeling is too uncomfortable for meditation.  It's always done from a seated position. 

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