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Reviewer: PaintedBird Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/13/2013 10:28 PM Title: Chapter 1

This is a very nice piece - quiet, reflective, genuine.  Like real couples live most of the time.  Very nice.

Reviewer: Vulcan Lover Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/25/2011 8:48 PM Title: Chapter 1

Well done story...

Reviewer: MyriadProBold Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11/07/2010 3:21 PM Title: Chapter 1

Nice job. This is a really powerful story. Wow.

Reviewer: Greywolf the Wanderer Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11/07/2010 8:12 AM Title: Chapter 1

oooh -- ow, ow, ouch!  Brrr!  Nicely done indeed!

Reviewer: Hypatia Kosh Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/07/2010 7:27 AM Title: Chapter 1

"I love you," he murmurs, unable to contain the words, and Spock's other hand comes down to stroke his hair in a rhythmic, soothing motion.

"I know," he says, and the reciprocal silent promise echoes through their connections wherever they touch. He never says it, but Jim never needs to hear it.

Aww, so shkwum. The hands parting is so anime. Toki ni ai wa from the Utena movie. I liked this, very nice vignette. I'm guessing you wrote it in one go? I thought the opening few sentences were very weak and the last sentence seemed awkward too, but you really got going a few paragraphs in. (JMHO--take it or leave it.)

I'm liking your Kirk and Spock a lot. Any plans to write anything longer, like, say, a 5-chapter story? Or did you post it and I missed it?



Author's Response:

Yeah I know it wasn't the strongest piece I've ever written, and I did churn it out in one go, but I also had boxing afterwards and figured what the hell. It's a bad attitude I have towards my shorter pieces :- Thanks for the comments, though!

I have two chaptered stories (one on FFN, one here) but neither are really fluffy or established relationship like this. Right now, I haven't got a plot that would last that long in the realm of lightheartedness (I am very bad at keeping horrific darkness and angst OUT of my longer shots.)

Reviewer: Hypatia Kosh Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/07/2010 7:20 AM Title: Chapter 1

For a courageous five minutes, he resists, then finally slips a hand into Spock's, and feels the gentle start of awareness deep inside the casket of Spock's body.

 

Ooo, nice turn of phrase.

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