Date: 10/10/2010 11:17 PM Title: Chapter 1
The story is really original and I'm looking forward the next chapters.
However, I feel I have to suggest you to improve your writing style: it seems you develope the plot with a quick pace. Take the time to develop more slowly the scenes and the inner thoughts too.
And a more fluid html style would be better for the eye too. :)
Don't take it as offence: I see potential here and, since the story deserves soo much, I'd like it to be perfect. :)
Can't wait to see how this bond will influence both Spock and Kirk lives, especially if they will become First Officer and Captain as predicted. I cannot imagine how the bond will be happy if Kirk will be the superior of his Master. XD