Date: 04/19/2011 7:55 PM Title: Ten Lies My Captain Told Me
I like the original "Don't worry, I won't die on you." so much better. Heartbreaking, yes, but it seems to be so much your style :D I read everything in your livejournal :D i'm a great fan and it's amazing how you speak two languages so well that you can compose fanfics in two languages :D I'm a bilingual myself, but writing fanfics in English just don't seem to have the sentimentality that I could have in my native language or the crassness if it is more suitable for what I wish to deliver. Anyways I'm a great fan :D I was hoping you would write more of the twin sons and their sakh-meh and Kirk haha. Cracks me up how the two kids call Kirk just Kirk... xD and the guy who drools LOL...
Date: 05/10/2010 9:46 PM Title: Ten Lies My Captain Told Me
I'm glad you changed the last line; it would have given a whole other tone to the fic otherwise. Plus, your other statements are humourous, so it fits better to end it with fluff than tragedy IMO. But then, I admit to being biaised, I love fluff ;)