You must login (register) to review.
Reviewer: Dahliaxat Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03/05/2010 5:55 PM Title: Chapter 1

Dear Simone,  I had to read this story it had never been rated.  What a tragedy it hasn't been. I find that sometimes when we see a huge paragraph we become lazy and skip it.  I do that to get to the good parts. Well, when an author can capture the reader with it's words and hold them there for the ride.  What a ride it is... Thank you my beta reader. I see now how when you give insight on your character on how that person is feeling you feel along with them and you gain understanding.  You wrote a story with so much truth...we all hoped that Jim and Spock were banging each other silly but really I believe something of what you've described in your story must have happened instead.  Jim cannot deny he loved Spock but Spock really, really didn't see it coming.  Not surprising he went to Gol...There relationship went all over the place and you ended it a good place the campfire scene.  Pleasant thoughts between them with McCoy being happy for them.  A family...

 

You must login (register) to review.