Date: 10/23/2014 6:40 PM Title: Never Let Me Go
Oh, it's so sweet to see Kirk's connection to the "spark of life" he is carrying. I like your Kirk: whole-hearted, passionate and honest. Not to mention smart and curious.
Uhura's comments and the revelation that Chekov is assigned to be the official "taster" of Kirk's food casts an ominous shade. Uhura's not a bitch, but she is self-centered. And Spock is struggling. Great dynamics among the characters in this chapter!
Yes, there are undercurrents in this story that will eventually surface and turn into plot bunnies!
Date: 10/23/2014 6:08 PM Title: For the Love of a Child
You know? I’m kind of hoping after this abduction right out of his house Spock’s father now insist I-Chaya or a new pet sehlat will be making a quick appearance.
“He liked the large, mostly-hairless cat with the elegant ears, almost as much as he liked the small house ape.”
This was ONE great line.
And one is truly blessed to be favored by a feline overlord. Sometimes they even bring home small alive animals home as tokens of affection. They watch proudly as their companion’s race around the house ‘hunting’ these gifts and sharpening their hunting skills. Now I am off to feed mine and turn on the tv so he can watch his hockey game.
Ah, I see you and your feline overlord, like me and mine, have come to an understanding of who rules the house.
Date: 10/23/2014 1:53 AM Title: For the Love of a Child
Yeah. Amazing to see a new Chapter. And then I'm so happy, that they have their Jim back. I really liked Sarek, when he came to help. More please.
I really hope you will write your other story 'Lessons Learned' a bit further also.
Date: 10/23/2014 12:28 AM Title: For the Love of a Child
Ugh, I am not down with this murder thing. Frank was looking at prison for fuck ton o' years after the child snatching stunt. Is Spock too stupid to record his phone call and attempt to trace it? And they call him a computer geek.
I get the whole Spock gets to be heroic bit, I mean I enjoy that too, but how much would that fuck with Jim's head to realize some day that the closest thing he had to a parent killed some guy ... it's like finding out your dad's in the mob or something.
Meh, sorry about the negative reaction. I just really don't like killing ... and neither does Jim Kirk so I think I'm still in the right fandom ... maybe?
Yeah, I knew someone wouldn't be happy with the "solution" to Frank, and that's okay. I don't always like what other people write, either. And if we look at canon, Jim Kirk's got plenty of blood on his hands.
Date: 10/22/2014 8:13 PM Title: Never Let Me Go
Sarek is quite insightful where his son is concerned: "'[W]hy does it bother you if James wishes to educate himself about the culture into which the child he will carry is to live?' He gave his son a shrewd look. 'Or is it that you are taken aback by the fact that James is spending more time learning about Vulcans than Nyota has?'" If that is what is really going on with Spock, it sounds as though by the end of this chapter, he may be questioning a few things. About his relationship with Uhura, as well as his initial judgment about Jim.
If you are laying the groundwork for the K/S relationship in the future, I appreciate the subtlety with which you doing it!
Oh, yeah; I'm laying groundwork big time. It won't happen for many more chapters, because this is a"slow burn" as I call it, a story that will develop at its own rhythm.