Date: 10/28/2011 11:35 AM Title: The Enemy Within
I liked the format! There are one or two that would be great from Spock's individual log as well.
It may very well happen! I love writing Spock's POV and he would be the most deliciously unreliable narrator....
Date: 10/28/2011 11:23 AM Title: The Enemy Within
...so I googled Sonnet 20 because I don't remember them by number at all, and now I am going to imagine that Gary got equally drunk and wrote it there.
YES!!! You Googled the sonnet? I officially love you for doing that. Sonnet 20 is just LOADED with slashy significance! Since Kirk doesn't remember it even happening, I never came to any decision about who wrote it there but Gary works for me!
Date: 10/28/2011 11:16 AM Title: The Enemy Within
Wow. Wow. Wow. WOW. That description of the sensation of the transporter. Just. Awesome.
YAAAAYYYY!!! I have a soft spot for that description because it's something I think a lot about (too much time on my hands? Quite possibly) and you're the first person who's ever loved it too! Made my day XD
Date: 10/28/2011 11:03 AM Title: The Corbomite Maneuver
Also I love your dialog. Often I have a hard time knowing where the script breaks off and you start (well, I haven't seen the episode in a long time either). Do you use a transcript or video?
Yay, I'm delighted to hear that I'm able to combine my writing with the episode writing! That's great to know, thank you! I usually only use the transcript if there's something I can't make out on screen (since the transcript doesn't tend to give the slashiest details, like the smouldering looks and the random touches) - I keep the DVD running in the background while I work and there's a lot of flicking back and forward between windows!
Date: 10/28/2011 10:12 AM Title: Where No Man Has Gone Before
I'm usually not a big fan of present tense, but you rock it SO HARD in these stories. Also I like your Gary a lot.
Thank you! I'm not sure why K/S makes me write in the present tense, but I don't think I've written ANYTHING past tense with these guys! XD I'm glad you liked Gary - it's something I worked hard on, because he's not one of my favourite characters but I wanted to make sure that didn't get in the way of drawing him in this fic. Thanks so much for this review!
Date: 10/28/2011 5:35 AM Title: The Naked Time
Thankyou so much for posting this. I've been looking forward your take on this episode ever since I worked out that you were writing about each ep. in order and you didn't disappoint.
When I first watched this episode a year ago I laughed myself silly at Kirk bitchslapping a Vulcan while trying to restrain my urge to hug a very distressed Spock. Excellent take on this ep (I expected nothing less) providing us with a unique look at the motivations behind their actions. I especially enjoyed your take on Spock's run in with Chapel – his struggle with her emotions on top of his own. With his acknowledgement of how flawed and short-sighted the human race can be if it suits them. I hope he gets over her touching him like that (the last thing Spock needs is to be traumatised on top of everything else).
Also loved the glimmer of pain you mention in Spock’s eyes before Kirk slaps him for the last time. As well as a mention of Spock’s mummy issues and emotional issues to boot. I could keep going on but I think I’ve flooded you enough with my rambling on how awesome this piece and series is. *here is a life jacket*
Wow - thank you so much for this! Reviews like this make my day! I'm glad you're enjoying the series - I'm REALLY enjoying writing it - and thanks for these lovely comments!
Date: 10/14/2011 4:25 AM Title: The Man Trap
I've read all the stories so far and I'm loving it. You fill in the blanks of each episode giving them even greater meaning to the characters. You've managed to weave in new motivations for the character's actions seamlessly with the storyline and action within the given episode. The gradually building tension between Spock and Kirk is brilliant.
Please continue this series, I cannot wait for an update.
Thank you so much! I'm delighted that you're enjoying the series - I'm certainly enjoying writing them! "Naked Time" is currently being beta'ed so I'm hoping to update again soon.
Reviews like this just make my day XD
Date: 09/17/2011 8:02 PM Title: The Man Trap
Another great addition to your Always Shall Be series. I'd forgotten how funny that conversation on the bridge between Spock and Uhura was. Kudos to both you and George Clayton Johnson.
When you alluded back to the events of the The Enemy Within in this instalment, I thought it was interesting that Kirk still seems most confused by the behaviour of his "good" side as he "stripped half-naked and waltzed across his quarters at a Vulcan", and not the blatant lust of the wolf.
I also loved your line about how Kirk relies on McCoy "to be the ship's conscience, and it's not helpful when the ship's conscience takes an emotional vacation in the middle of a mission." That describes McCoy for me in a nutshell.
I can't wait for your take on The Naked Time.
Thank you! I know - I *love* that scene on the bridge and I can't even take credit for it - that's all George Clayton Johnson, Leonard Nimoy and Nichelle Nichols magic!
My feeling is that the whole love story plays out like a romantic comedy (to borrow shamelessly from the producer of Star Trek XI): you take one step closer to the romantic leads working out what's going on, and then you go right ahead and frustrate the hell out of the audience by having them rationalize it all away again. I don't think Kirk's really in touch with how strongly he's attracted to Spock at this point, and Spock's just - well, Spock. They're both very good at finding ways of explaining to themselves why they've acted in a certain way, and I think that's kind of adorable. Right up to the point where I start yelling at the screen, "OH JUST KISS HIM, FOR THE LOVE OF GOD!"
And I am *sooooooo* enjoying writing The Naked Time.
Thank you for this lovely (and thoughtful) review!
Date: 09/04/2011 12:16 PM Title: The Enemy Within
Wonderfully done. Kirk just got a big surprise, didn't he? Nothing like having that little twinge of something, like a tiny knat flying around your head, to suddenly come into full focus. This ties in wonderfully with the Mudd's Women story, because it each gives their own POV which compliments each other. Little things are changing inside each one, as they both analyse their own growing and shifting feelings towards each other, and new discoveries within themselves. Shatner and Nimoy captured this so beautifully in those three years (whether it was intensional or not) because their real life relationship on the set developed in a similar manner...they did not particularly like each other in the beginning, but a real friendship developed between the two, and that in turn helped develop the relationship between their characters.
Date: 09/04/2011 12:07 PM Title: Mudd's Women
Kirk was really starting to fall for Eve, and Spock can't understand and places it on the affects of the drug. I love how your building up the underlying emotions in Spock and how he's slowing changing within and how he sees Jim, but doesn't have the experience to understand what it is yet he's feeling. How I interpet this is that Spock is discovering his first real friendship and feeling the first twinges of jealousy seeing Kirk interested in another, but doesn't know or understand what that even is yet.
Hurray, that's exactly what I was hoping to get across: I wanted Spock to be jealous of Eve but not aware that he was jealous. Thanks for the lovely review!
Date: 09/04/2011 11:40 AM Title: The Enemy Within
Every time I read an installment of this series, I fall in love with it all over again. You give such depth to their characters and relationships. It's completely unforced, but always manages to draw out the element of slash that's only latent in the episodes themselves. Keep it coming at its wonderful pace--you have me entirely strung along!